What do you think of my poem?

I like it a lot actually, I would modify the third and second to last lines to get the rhythm down, but I like the scene and I love the details. The only thing I can really say is that I would put some illusion to the fact that it is an umbrella in the actual poem, you can tell it probably isn't a person, but the idea of the umbrella is so good I would like to see some more clues. 7